Hello,guys.
My little sister's teacher wrote a Recommendation Letter for her.She translated it into English.But she is not sure if it's OK.Could you guys check it out for her,to see if there are some mistakes on grammar,phrase expressing ,misused words or anything not so proper.Please don't hesitate to tell.You know ,it's kindda important to my sis.She really need some advises from you guys.Thank you very much!!!!:)
Here's the letter:

Dear Sir and Madam:
I deem it a great pleasure to write this letter of reference on behalf of Nie to support her application to study in your university.

I am the vice dean of International Finance School and Nie is one of my outstanding students majoring in Finance.

I first came to know Nie in 2009 when I taught her the course of Finance. As an undergraduate student, Nie has left me a deep impression of her intellect, devotion and passion for the field. Beside the issue we talk about in class, sometimes she also discuss some latest topics in finance area in my office, she expresses her ideas clearly and has good analytical skills. With the passion on study , she got a desirable result in her final exam. While, I have to mention that she is girl of little obstinacy. When someone argue with her, she always stick to her ground. Besides this, she has good personality.

Apart from her excellent academic performance. Nie has demonstrated a high degree of leadership capacity and organizational skill in her active participation in the campus activities. In 2009, she represented her class in the Finance Knowledge Contest. As the team leader, she was ambitious and made adequate preparation, she consulted experts, collected information and helped training her team. Just several days before the contest , she had serious cold, got fever and finally was sent to hospital. Each team member thought she would just quit and all their efforts were in vain. While she just insisted to keep working with the contest, thus making others surprised. What they devoted swept to their victory, they won the championship of the contest. Later, her team attended Financial English Competition, she in charge of the vital part which the competitor must analysis the latest international finance events given by the question-master in English. Thanks to her agile mind and strong English proficiency, she made a profound and comprehensive analysis, with good teamwork, finally her team won the second place in the competition.

Based on her performance, I believe Nie is a qualified candidate for your program. Should be of any further information, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Sincerely,
XXX professor

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