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#212687 - 10/02/13 05:30 AM This [b]transforming / transformation[/b] of ...  
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He was a notorious gangster. After his marriage, he dissociated himself from the gang. This sudden transforming / transformation of identity surprised all his close friends and the police.

Can either bold word be used? And does "of identity" fit in the sentence?

Thanks..

#212692 - 10/03/13 12:48 AM Re: This [b]transforming / transformation[/b] of ... [Re: Lionel Koh]  
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Could someone please help? Thanks.

#212695 - 10/03/13 11:06 AM Re: This [b]transforming / transformation[/b] of ... [Re: Lionel Koh]  
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I'd go with transformation. Transforming would refer to the process of changing his identity, transformation to the result.

#212734 - 10/06/13 06:14 PM Re: This [b]transforming / transformation[/b] of ... [Re: Lionel Koh]  
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Faldage is right. And "of identity" is tautological---excess baggage, already implied.

Near the end of that sentence is a rare instance when "as well as" might work better than "and." It emphasis the object and sets up the punchline.

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#212738 - 10/06/13 11:17 PM Re: This [b]transforming / transformation[/b] of ... [Re: Lionel Koh]  
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I'd leave "of identity" in. It helps clarify just what the transformation was.


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