I have been scolded for usingellipsis excessively. But no native speaker of English
would have trouble understanding the shorter version of your sentence. Probably
less desirable in print than in conversation. (my ellipsis agai;n)

ellipsis
n.,
pl. 3ses# 73scz#8 5L < Gr elleipsis: see prec.6
1 Gram. the omission of a word or words necessary for complete grammatical construction but understood in the context (Ex.: “if possible” for “if it is possible”)
2 ELLIPSIS POINTS