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The farmer was looking into the sky
As he fed beans to his pigs in the sty
And when all the gases
Escaped from there asses
He thought, if I light-up now, those pigs will fly
And Candy, I like your last line change but now there are too many breaks in the rhythm.
Can we bring it back into line:
A farmer looked into the sky
And fed beans to his pigs in the sty.
He said, as the gases
Escaped from their asses,
"If I light up now, pigs will fly!"
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To keep the original post short I didn't list all possibe exceptions.
Sorry, I suppose I do tend to be a little windy. Speaking of gasses.
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This wofa is too exacting. No, he's not. If the rhythm is wrong it ain't a limerick. Yeah correct. I am just faux grumbling. I enjoyed the work oout I am thinking of resigning from this job. Don't you dare!  it is tough to resign from obsession.
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And Candy, I like your last line change but now there are too many breaks in the rhythm.
I knew you would fix it Wofa  now come back to our other game......
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Did you know that Gilbert & Sullivan wrote limericks? They didn't call them that, of course, but limericks they are, all the same. Here's a song from Ruddigore, Act I ("If you wish in this world to advance"), and here are the complete lyrics if you want to mouse over them. (Notice the liberties Gilbert takes with the rhyme scheme. Never with the rhythm, though. Besides, the music wouldn't permit it.) SONG--ROBIN:
My boy, you may take it from me,
That of all the afflictions accurst
With which a man's saddled
And hampered and addled,
A diffident nature's the worst.
Though clever as clever can be--
A Crichton of early romance--
You must stir it and stump it,
And blow your own trumpet,
Or, trust me, you haven't a chance!
Chorus: If you wish in the world to advance,
Your merits you're bound to enhance,
You must stir it and stump it,
And blow your own trumpet,
Or, trust me, you haven't a chance!
Now take, for example, my case:
I've a bright intellectual brain--
In all London city
There's no one so witty--
I've thought so again and again.
I've a highly intelligent face--
My features cannot be denied--
But, whatever I try, sir,
I fail in--and why, sir?
I'm modesty personified!
If you wish in the world to advance, etc.
As a poet, I'm tender and quaint--
I've passion and fervour and grace--
From Ovid and Horace
To Swinburne and Morris,
They all of them take a back place.
Then I sing and I play and I paint:
Though none are accomplished as I,
To say so were treason:
You ask me the reason?
I'm diffident, modest, and shy!
If you wish in the world to advance, etc.
(Exit Robin.)
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Interesting, thanks much.
----please, draw me a sheep----
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Thanks Wofa, I enjoyed that and I marvel at the performance in the video. Not an easy musical to perform, I bet.
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It doesn't have to be staged as cimematically as that; an amateur group can present it quite adequately. The music is sweeping, and some of the patter parodies itself. ("This particularly rapid unintelligible patter isn't generally heard, and if it is, it doesn't matter...") And Mad Margaret's character can stop the show!
(Basingstoke, my dear.)
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My efforts to write are a dud.
The rhythm has me sweating blood.
I can come up with rhymes
That work two or three times,
But the meter's like swilling warm Bud.
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I read all these lim'riks we've written
And confess that I'm thoroughly smitten.
But the game that was Sparteye's
Had more, and me hearties,
Those FIRST and LAST words we're omittin' !
BUCKMINSTER FULLER -- BYLAWS
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