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get the the translation of thisTry this; These are really good translations as far as I can follow.
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In the limerick, above the rhyming of lines 3 and 4 does not fit in with the scheme of lines 1, 2, and 5.
Not quite sure I understand you. None of the lines in the poem rhyme: Bees, wasp, hurt, doesn't, or hornet. The number of syllables per line does vary a bit: 9 or 10 and 6 or 7.
Ceci n'est pas un seing.
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e.e.cummings
a pretty a day
(and every fades)
is here and away
(but born are maids
to flower an hour
in all,all)
o eyes to flower
until so blithe
a doer a wooer
some limber and lithe
some very fine mower
a tall;tall
some jerry so very
(and nellie and fan)
some handsomest harry
(and sally and nan
they tremble and cower
so pale:pale)
for betty was born
to never say nay
but lucy could learn
and lily could pray
and fewer were shyer
than doll. .. doll
( flowers and pretty scenery?)
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@ Z: if the writer/poet has used bees, wasp, and hornet for a, he should have used hurt and stung (or something similar) for b. Alternatively, he could have kept doesn't and hurt as b, but then used totally unconnected words for a ---
IM(not so in this case)HO
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that seems to me like over-analysis for what was surely intended as a joke, on what is already a joke poetry form. in fact, it reminds me of those folks who 'workshop' limericks in an attempt to perfect the form. 8-)
-joe (reactionary? who says I'm reactionary?) friday
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I reacted not to the post, but the 'making fun of a form' sense of the limerick. Maybe I came on a bit too strong, but... Over analysis? Is the pot calling the saucepan names, I ask you? ":)" not a single person on this board can be accused of over analysis.
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It is amazing how many people will find something to pick at.
I am really enjoying the poetry. Keep it up despite the
criticism.
Anhedonic comes to mind.
Last edited by LukeJavan8; 03/18/10 03:15 PM. Reason: typo
----please, draw me a sheep----
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I'm sorry if my analysis bothered people. That was not my aim. Again apologies.
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It does not bother me.
It shows interest and caring, and I actually sort of enjoyed
following your process. Don't apologize for what you post
on this site, others don't.
----please, draw me a sheep----
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I think I dated her in high school.
"I don't know which is worse: ignorance or apathy. And, frankly, I don't care." - Anonymous
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