This is always fun. Your friend is likely to get divergent and conflicting advice and will have to decide what works for her.

It seems possible and even likely to me that schools in China might be looking for different qualities in candidates than those in the U.S. or Europe. Also, different regulations might apply.

1. Some of the information from the script should be on the resume (matriculation paperwork), i.e. the dissertation topic and work experience. Your friend might mention it in the interview, but might also state the relevance to the position (degree program) for which she is applying.

2. In that resume, she should enumerate the article titles and where their published and what awards they received.

3. The interviewee usually doesn't have control of the interview, so it's best to think of each of the paragraphs as a separable component that can be brought in to answer specific questions.

4. Drop the "self-comment" section altogether.

5. In U.S. schools - particularly grad schools - they want to understand the applicant's drive, their ability to finish what they start, to go the last mile of the marathon, and their potential for "doing great things."

5. Some of these paragraph responses can be brought in when the interviewer asks for general comments. For example, the interviewer asks about your motivation, and you can extract a thread of commitment to education from your scriptlets above to make another script:
"My mother was a teacher and I was (we were) raised to value and respect education. I have been a tutor myself and have studied education. My dissertation topic was related to education. My life has consisted of a continual effort to educate myself and to help others become educated. When I finish my program of X, I'm going to do Y with it."

Or she is asked "How do you feel about your communication skills?" and she responds,
"My experience as a tutor and instructor has helped me develop oral communication skills, while my dissertation and a series of articles I wrote helped to hone my writing skills. I'm also quite capable in English."

Something like that.

I would avoid listing a bunch of accomplishments without context of some goal or unifying thread. This way you're not saying, "I have good communication skills," because every candidate will say he has excellent communication skills. Instead, she's giving the person all the information they need to draw the conclusion herself.

In the first example, she's not saying, "I'm committed to education," but again the conclusion is obvious. Good luck to your friend.