Dear etaoin: worth reading, but right off quick I found myself disagreeing with him. If a woman walks into a room,
and men's jaws drop, that doesn't mean she is beautiful. It
might mean she neglected to put on garments below the waist.
And then of course jaws wouldn't drop, but kilts might tilt.
The answer is to listen to what you've written and revise
until it reads right. Only problem with me is it still sounds lousy.