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#8525 10/20/00 03:21 AM
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Here's my poem using "ululate." It's a working draft but I'm printing it here in thanks for the amazing response to my original query.

Suite for One Voice

Some evenings my single alto notes
rise straight up
like a mockingbird
before it plunges into Mozart.

I want to sing two-part inventions
in one voice
from a deep place within me.
Those unaccompanied notes to intercept

others a third higher
plaiting a sublime overlay
like strands of Sunday glossolalia
or a Tuvan monk's glottal hum

ululating from his Siberian village
into fog over the Farallones.


#8526 10/20/00 10:31 AM
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Cool, awaddle.
One nitpick, however: to my ears, ululating isn't "suite"!



#8527 10/20/00 02:15 PM
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But it is strong, and out of the strong came forth suiteness, so perhaps from the suite will come forth strength.

(Apologies to the Bible and Tate and Lyle)


#8528 10/20/00 05:55 PM
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But it is strong, and out of the strong came forth suiteness, so perhaps from the suite will come forth strength.

How nice it was to "get" a reference without any need for pulling my hair out! Or, shaving it off for that matter.



#8529 10/20/00 06:28 PM
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awaddle,
I just love the last four lines. They really resonate and reverberate.

They sound so good I actually find myself disinclined to tie them down to specific meaning(s). For instance, I don't know where the Farallones are, or what they're like, but now I don't want to. Something akin to Carroll's Jabberwocky, which is actually great praise as far as I'm concerned!




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