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He was a notorious gangster. After his marriage, he dissociated himself from the gang. This sudden transforming / transformation of identity surprised all his close friends and the police.
Can either bold word be used? And does "of identity" fit in the sentence?
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Could someone please help? Thanks.
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I'd go with transformation. Transforming would refer to the process of changing his identity, transformation to the result.
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Faldage is right. And "of identity" is tautological---excess baggage, already implied.
Near the end of that sentence is a rare instance when "as well as" might work better than "and." It emphasis the object and sets up the punchline.
Last edited by Hallyx; 10/06/13 06:17 PM.
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I'd leave "of identity" in. It helps clarify just what the transformation was.
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