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From a cartoon in Harper's Magazine a few years ago:
"Dragnet" Haiku
Eleven-fifty-seven P.M.
The white chrysanthemum
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Thanks, Alex. Nice to see you back. P.S.--Got anything for "Car 54, Where Are You?" 
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I'm afraid you've lost me. Is that a really a haiku? Please explain...
Sara x
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as far as i know,
haiku have 3 lines of
5 syllables
7 syllables and
5 syllables.
there should also be a word to indicate the season.
if you translated the "white chrysanthemum" as
"shiroi kiku" it would be the final 5 syllables.
the first part could have many ways to be translated.
the question is, is this an english or japanese haiku?
let me try and find out if it's a well known haiku here.
there is also a haiku in english trend. i don't know much about this.
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a few year ago-- as times square was in the process of being cleaned up--many of the old theaters (which had become movie theaters for XXX rated shows) where closed-- until they where renovated-- the marques had "urban haiku's" (there were several contest to submit haiku's) the one i remember was:
With a florish,
the waitress rearranges the
smears on the table.
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The white chrysanthemum
Shouldn't that be, "The black dahlia"? Or am I splitting hers?*
*[eeewwww emoticon]
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The white chrysanthemum
Shouldn't that be, "The black dahlia"? Or am I splitting hers?Is this a morbid reference to the story, The Odor of Chrysanthemums, i.e. masking the smell of death? Jackie wants Car 54 Where Are You; I want Police Squad.
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Just the facts, re: "Is it really a haiku?" Well, it's actually a joke, and therefore exempt from strict rules of ... haikuity, I guess. You have to imagine Jack Webb's voice as Sgt. Friday as he speaks in that deadpan cop's voice: "Eleven fifty-seven PM..." -- it begins like a description of a stake out or something, but then it ends with an enigmatic reference to a flower, inducing a chuckle.
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"Tell us what happened."
"The moon looking like a crane..."
"Just want the facts, ma'am."
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