<See the Army member. See his gun. He goes to war. He shoots his gun. He gets extra pay. The extra pay is $10 a day. The extra pay starts on the first day of the month.>

I still think the rewrite of this should be-

"See the Army member. See their gun. They go to war. They shoot their gun. They get extra pay. The extra pay is $10 a day. The extra pay starts on the first day of the month."

Really when you get used to it, it doesn't seem cumbersome, and quickly assumes the "transparency" which good plain writing should have.

Johnjohn