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From a cartoon in Harper's Magazine a few years ago:
"Dragnet" Haiku
Eleven-fifty-seven P.M. The white chrysanthemum
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Thanks, Alex. Nice to see you back. P.S.--Got anything for "Car 54, Where Are You?"
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I'm afraid you've lost me. Is that a really a haiku? Please explain...
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as far as i know, haiku have 3 lines of 5 syllables 7 syllables and 5 syllables. there should also be a word to indicate the season. if you translated the "white chrysanthemum" as "shiroi kiku" it would be the final 5 syllables. the first part could have many ways to be translated. the question is, is this an english or japanese haiku? let me try and find out if it's a well known haiku here.
there is also a haiku in english trend. i don't know much about this.
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a few year ago-- as times square was in the process of being cleaned up--many of the old theaters (which had become movie theaters for XXX rated shows) where closed-- until they where renovated-- the marques had "urban haiku's" (there were several contest to submit haiku's) the one i remember was:
With a florish, the waitress rearranges the smears on the table.
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The white chrysanthemum
Shouldn't that be, "The black dahlia"? Or am I splitting hers?*
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The white chrysanthemum
Shouldn't that be, "The black dahlia"? Or am I splitting hers?Is this a morbid reference to the story, The Odor of Chrysanthemums, i.e. masking the smell of death? Jackie wants Car 54 Where Are You; I want Police Squad.
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Just the facts, re: "Is it really a haiku?" Well, it's actually a joke, and therefore exempt from strict rules of ... haikuity, I guess. You have to imagine Jack Webb's voice as Sgt. Friday as he speaks in that deadpan cop's voice: "Eleven fifty-seven PM..." -- it begins like a description of a stake out or something, but then it ends with an enigmatic reference to a flower, inducing a chuckle.
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Warriors clashing Khrushchev due in eastern sky They seek the rickshaw
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Belker, all is forgiven. Oh, I loved Hill Street Blues!! [beaming smile] That is the only show in my adult life that pulled me into it so far that it seemed real. Daniel J. Travanti: swoon! Veronica Hamel: drop-dead gorgeous. "And, hey--let's be careful out there".
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My first haiku. Does it scan? Or have I missed the point (again)? Must it be Dragnet connected ?
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Japanese haiku have the form 5 - 7 - 5 syllables. The cunning so-and-so's get away with packing a lot of meaning into their haikus because they don't have lots of inconvenient linguistic crutches such as articles, prepositions, particles and the like to deal with (and I understand they omit them when they're inconvenient, e.g. ga and no get dropped, but perhaps a Japanese speaker can elucidate here). We tend to say "it should be seventeen syllables in three lines" and leave it at that. Some say it should be three short lines, with the second line longer than the others. Others say that the line break should occur at a natural break in the meaning. I remember reading that the best haiku have two unrelated statements in the first two sections (the 5 - 7) and that the two first statements are tied together in the third (5). As I understand it, the three lines is a convenience, not a requirement, but I could be wrong. NicholasW's contribution above has the correct Japanese 5 -7 - 5 formation and he's used three lines. Mine doesn't scan, but has three lines . I only know about this stuff at all because a colleague in another life started a haiku-writing competition in the department I was working in at morning tea one day. When all the response she received was a set of completely blank looks, she gave us a short lesson ... before you knew it, we were reading everything on the subject we could lay our hands on in an effort to outdo each other in obscureness and purity of formation. As a craze, it lasted about six weeks! I googled this link which isn't bad: http://www.ahapoetry.com/haidefjr.htm
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Cpt. Kiwi:
My college roommate and I came up with this haiku about 10 years ago:
Generic Haiku
Five syllables here Something about the seasons This line is real deep
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Alex, That was quite inspired! And even though I'm sure y'all didn't intend it as such, it's a great mnemonic for teaching the haiku form. Thanks.
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The generic haiku is great. I still like Stephen Fry's
To make a poem With seventeen syllables Is very diffic
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Stephen Fry's: To make a poem With seventeen syllables Is very diffic
Oh! Oh! Oh! My feeling exactly. Thanks for a Monday chuckle, Rod!
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What a surprise and a pleasure to find that the generic haiku is useful as well as ornamental. Stephen Fry's is funny too. Is that the same person who plays "Jeeves" on the British television show, or is that Stephen Frey? Anyway, Jeeves is hilarious. Sadly, I am more like Bertie Wooster myself. Credit for the "generic haiku" should be shared with one James Evans, now of Seattle, WA.
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. Is that the same person who plays "Jeeves" on the British television show,
The same, and together with Hugh Laurie as Wooster, it was one of the most inspired pieces of casting I have ever seen on television, IMHO.
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>Hugh Laurie as Wooster
and, speaking of connections, wasn't Laurie one of Black Adder's main foils?
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speaking of connections, wasn't Laurie one of Black Adder's main foils? [b/lue]
Yes he was, as was Fry. Fry had a recurring character as Lord/General Melchett, and Laurie was very good as the dimwitted Prince Regent in sereis 3 and Blackadder's leftenant in series 4.
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